Episode 1 (call the series what ever ya want =p)

[YoshikiRose]

I skimmed very quickly through it; get your writing style fixed.

Yes, I've written things for fun, and they ended up being around 10 pages long

they were...emm..hentai

Anyways, just work at it, and be sure to at least put SOME details in there.

[jstarbob]

Thanks fluff. I will improve my writting style, but I am taking time off from writting to get ideas together because this didnt work out, but thats fine I wasnt expecting it too be amazing ;D.

Last but not least thanks for all of your helpfull comments .

[~*Hieislove*~]

FluffyJuney said:

they were...emm..hentai

BAD FLUFF ! Shame on you your so young *tear*

[YoshikiRose]

Hey. It was only one episode.

It was extremely detailed, too ¬0¬