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Post by ~*Hieislove*~ on Dec 30, 2004 15:48:47 GMT -5
o.k..cant wait for the rest
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Post by Angel on Dec 30, 2004 17:03:56 GMT -5
lol is that lots of sarcasim?
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Post by SockPerson on Dec 31, 2004 5:37:04 GMT -5
Jebus...that was long. It was...nice. I'll admit I was droning on a bit reading it. There doesn't seem to be that much conflict going on with the characters. Everyone is..."nice", too nice. The only character that really had a problem with Arora, was the mother, and she didn't have much contact with her and left. Everyone else seemed to just be fawning all over her for some reason. I didn't get what was so great about her either. I mean sure if it was a movie then I could see how beautiful she was and stuff, but it didn't work out for me here. She just doesn't have much of a personality to me. Though, it was written very *prepares to use a word he hasn't used in a while* lovely. That is the only reason I'm giving you an honest opinion, because, you do write very well. I just think the characters are a little bland. It's still a good story.
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Post by Angel on Jan 1, 2005 12:35:03 GMT -5
lol lol ty, I rather honest opinions, its what I need. That was just the 1st chpt, start'n off the story'n all, guess I'll post chapt II R.r; ty fer yer opinon and what not, I really appriciate it lots!
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Post by Eris on Jan 4, 2005 5:03:58 GMT -5
Lol, I was gonna post something really long but my browser messed up and I lost it x.x Anywurds, in short words, the reason they do fawn over her is she's a goddess they're unwillingly attracted by her natural beauty and charm. And the story is just starting, let it flow x.X Pssh, typical guy wanting violence in almost everything they see/read or whateva Knowing Paralee, she can make a massacre if she wanted too XD
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Post by SockPerson on Jan 4, 2005 17:44:42 GMT -5
Lol, I was gonna post something really long but my browser messed up and I lost it x.x Anywurds, in short words, the reason they do fawn over her is she's a goddess they're unwillingly attracted by her natural beauty and charm. And the story is just starting, let it flow x.X Pssh, typical guy wanting violence in almost everything they see/read or whateva Knowing Paralee, she can make a massacre if she wanted too XD Typical guy....I have not been called that in long ass time......lol.. The fact that I am even criticizing Arora's "personality" shows that I don't give a sh!t how beautiful she is, and want to know what’s going on with her as a person. In this story when ever she seems to start thinking she stares off somewhere while some dude admires her beauty again. Goddess…I got that bit, but is that all she is? And I said it needed "CONFLICT" not violence, (there is a difference) especially if your story depends on dialogue. Bah...I don't wanna argue about this. Lets just say that you liked it more than I did. I'm really interested in hearing what you have to say about this story though. So please post your thoughts on the subject. Perhaps I'm missing something?
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Post by Angel on Jan 5, 2005 12:45:44 GMT -5
lol lol lol XD oyh lol Yes I could make a massacre if I wanted, did that lots in Demon Wars lol I'm juz get'n dare. 1st chapts just start'n off on the past and whats mildly happened to her anyway lol
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Post by Eris on Jan 8, 2005 14:25:52 GMT -5
Typical guy....I have not been called that in long ass time......lol.. The fact that I am even criticizing Arora's "personality" shows that I don't give a sh!t how beautiful she is, and want to know what’s going on with her as a person. In this story when ever she seems to start thinking she stares off somewhere while some dude admires her beauty again. Goddess…I got that bit, but is that all she is? And I said it needed "CONFLICT" not violence, (there is a difference) especially if your story depends on dialogue. Bah...I don't wanna argue about this. Lets just say that you liked it more than I did. I'm really interested in hearing what you have to say about this story though. So please post your thoughts on the subject. Perhaps I'm missing something? Well, you got called that now I guess ;D Anywurds, that's...nice that you don't care how she looks, but you guys are more "Visual" so, I sorta understand why you don't care for her looks If you waited until she actually finished writing the story then maybe you could find out what she's like. Although you may not have asked for violence, that's what it sounded to me And yea, I liked it more than you did and I already told Paralee what I thought about it, but if you want to know I also think they do fawn over her a bit, the story it's very well written but the characters are kinda blank in aspect of personality I still like it a lot and will wait to see what happens I don't really think you're "missing" anything, you just have your opinion and I have mine And if you wonder why am I giving you such a hard time about giving your opinion it's because I like to argue with people over silly things ;D
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Post by Angel on Jan 9, 2005 18:38:25 GMT -5
lol ty Kristi, I think lol...though u seem to be on yer own side of this entire argument/opinionated talk lol the characters and their personalities will develop as I write it, I don't give u the characters personality right then and there, juz dun!
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Post by Eris on Jan 11, 2005 16:40:30 GMT -5
Lol, yea; I know
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Post by Angel on Jan 18, 2005 10:59:35 GMT -5
lol oyh My lil sis who has been reading TMR way b4 any of yall see it typed has/is calling my 2nd chpt of this story the best fer now. Guess I should get da type'n it lol fall'n behind in the type'n it up >.<;
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Post by Eris on Jan 20, 2005 19:54:18 GMT -5
Ya betta get to it already!! I warned ya slave!!! I mean, dear friend ;D I wuv you Paralee ^.^
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