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Post by gokusaiyan on Mar 23, 2005 21:42:09 GMT -5
a baby fighter who is the devil's son...wow, that's definitely original!!! ... man, i'm going to sleep cause here it's like 4:45 a.m... i'm sleepy...
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jstarbob
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Post by jstarbob on Mar 23, 2005 21:51:59 GMT -5
k... lol by the way are you being sarcastic because I have never heard anything like that idea and I thought it would be cool
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Post by Trunksangel79 on Mar 23, 2005 22:08:30 GMT -5
It's a good episode even if there was alot of talking.But I like it,Keep up the good work. ;D
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Post by jstarbob on Mar 23, 2005 22:13:30 GMT -5
trunks angel your so nice... ;D
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Post by gokusaiyan on Mar 24, 2005 5:49:42 GMT -5
k... lol by the way are you being sarcastic because I have never heard anything like that idea and I thought it would be cool no, i wasn't sarcastic...i just said that it is original. if the story is well written, it can have any subject... ;D
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Majunks
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Post by Majunks on Mar 24, 2005 9:12:48 GMT -5
It looks like you guys are having fun. Oh yeah Goku, it sounds like the action in your parentasis isn't so much an action sequence of events, it's more like discription. It's good though, but maybe you should consider switching to a narrative form rather than script, in the next Saga of course.
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Post by gokusaiyan on Mar 24, 2005 11:21:41 GMT -5
well, i always thought that dialogue describes a situation and reflects the characters' personalities better rather than narration...i mean there is a lot of dialogue in DBZ...but maybe you are right, i will try to put more narration into my fan fic...
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Majunks
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Post by Majunks on Mar 25, 2005 10:34:55 GMT -5
No, I mean the way you discribe it is kinda like a novel rather than a script but I see where you're coming from. I'm just saiyan that you should try an episode or two in narrative just to see how that works. You'd probably be a good novelist from the way you write but ultimately since your the author it's up to you and I'll still read anyway. Just a little food for thought.
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Post by gokusaiyan on Mar 25, 2005 14:34:02 GMT -5
as i said i will try to put more narration into my episodes ...starting from episode 5, because episode 4 is already written and will be up tomorrow... ;D
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Post by jstarbob on Mar 25, 2005 15:36:51 GMT -5
check out the way I write my fafics... it goes by a lot quicker the way I do it! ;D
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