Majunks
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Post by Majunks on Apr 7, 2005 8:38:03 GMT -5
Yeah, this chapter was cut a little short, and it left off in a bad place to stop. You needed a little more in between or you needed to extend the ending before you left it to a clif hanger. This hasn't really been your best chapter but your writing is coming along.
And don't be so hard on your self, your writing doesn't suck. Like I said it's comming along every well. You do a good job. This chapter might need a little work but you can make up for it in chapter seven.
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Majunks
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Post by Majunks on Apr 15, 2005 9:33:23 GMT -5
Oops... that's his name? Oh crap! I have to appoloogize to quite a few people. (Runs out door)
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Post by Majunks on Apr 14, 2005 9:09:24 GMT -5
What are you on about? What's twisted or disturbing about that? Aside from the Dingo nothing, twisted and disturbing is just my catchephrase (It's a good thing when I say twisted and disturbing), and there's nothing wrong with twisted and disturbing stuff. Just look at FLCL that was F-ing hilarious! Just make your fic good and it's twisted and disturbing.
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Majunks
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Post by Majunks on Apr 13, 2005 8:24:50 GMT -5
Okay then. Make sure it is violent and/or stupid.
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Post by Majunks on Apr 12, 2005 10:32:30 GMT -5
I have an idea for a Zone of the Enders fan fic. It would be that Dingo finds out that Anubis was only the first in a line of super orbital frames, and a plan is being made to build a god - like O.F. which will reign supreme over Earth and Mars. So Dingo sets out in Naked Jehuty in order to prevent this plan from going forward That seems kinda twisted and disturbing. I'll read it! Sure, the Paris/Valise one was funny
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Post by Majunks on Apr 6, 2005 9:36:22 GMT -5
That, should be funny. Oh, is the gift a blender? No never mind, don't spoil it.
Wait, is it Norman that fights Spidey or does harry get warped in there? And this one is the Real Mary-Jane not that water clone right? That should be pretty cool.
Okay then. wait we need a name. I was thinking something like the Giuld of Evil Fan Ficers!
Lol, fish is funny. I'll put that in somehow.
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Majunks
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Post by Majunks on Apr 6, 2005 8:51:41 GMT -5
Thanks Syxx. You too GS. Yeah i figured Yamcha could end up with Diareah or something, Piccolo would turn nice, Vegeta would have food posioning and Tien would go crazy(excuse me crazier) ANd they would need to Find Akira to fix it all. He would be like God too... only for Dragonball Z. And I could finally explain why Launch left the Manga and the Anime for no reason. But enough about that, what else does everyone have?
Side note: Don't worry, it's from DBZ not DBGT so there won't be a chibi Goku, just to make everyone feel better.
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Post by Majunks on Apr 6, 2005 8:33:16 GMT -5
Uh, it's not quite the House Of Mouse. You see Goku randomly says that Chi-Chi should open a resturant for no apparent reason. Then Gohan develops the idea, they go to capsule corp for some reason and then Chi Chi decides to open the resturant. Akira Toriyama and Launch will be involved... yeah it's weird but I thought it would turn out funny.
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Post by Majunks on Apr 5, 2005 10:38:21 GMT -5
Since the writers thread kinda died, i decided that we should have a thread for writers to shoot out their ideas for fics in a semi friendly and unlimited enviroment. But this is as close as I got so, whatever. Anyone got any good ideas? I was just thinking of "Chi-Chi's diner". Any thoughts?
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Majunks
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Post by Majunks on Apr 13, 2005 8:37:28 GMT -5
Alright, good luck dudes! Make it funny or I Hit You With A Semi! (Shouldn't have to come to that though)
Okay, that makes me feel better. If they were still little kids that would be a bit to wrong.
Why was Trunks there when he didin't say anything? No matter, the parody marathon was great, hope the next one comes out just as well.
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Post by Majunks on Apr 8, 2005 9:33:51 GMT -5
What was wrong with Insense candles?... Oh no, I lost my cloud!
Hahaha! Everyone keeps calling Goten and Trunks gay! That's hilarious. I have to keep remembering they're little kids so i don't think that. But seriously this is funny, I can't help laughing my ass off! You and Syxx have to write a comedy together, there is no way anyone can get out without dying of laughter!
Side note: Goku and Krillin didn't use the free condums? They wasted that money for nothing. It's also funny that Goten and Trunks are better at relationships than Goku and Krillin.
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Post by Majunks on Apr 7, 2005 9:01:50 GMT -5
So this is what happened between DBZ and Dragonball GT? Krillin and Goku got tampons and free condoms? HAHAHAHAHAHA,... HAHA! Oh screw the laughin. LMAO! That gives me an idea for some reason though. Anyway that was pretty funny...
Side note: Seems more like a DBZ Sitcom than a Parody (Just Saiyan)
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Post by Majunks on Apr 6, 2005 8:45:19 GMT -5
Why does everyone want to absorb everyone else? Where is Kabito Kai? And what timeline does this break off of, GT? I'm still kinda lost but it's all starting to come back together... I think.
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Post by Majunks on Apr 4, 2005 9:02:15 GMT -5
I'm confused. The whole Idea of Goku and Trunks not being around to save everyone's a** is interesting and all but why do they need to kill Piccolo when he's already in Hell? And why did time move so fast, that makes it harder to understand. What does Cell have to do with anything? Whose side are Pai and Akia on? And how may I add did Super 17 and Android 17 fuse when they're the same guy? It's not that this is bad, I'm just seriously lost. Just make sure, that it makes a little mre sense. Like I said the idea is pretty darned good but you presented it in a confusing way. Point of Rant: I'm Still readin the next chapter, the story sounds cool.
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Post by Majunks on Apr 5, 2005 9:15:20 GMT -5
So he can manage to stay in the hyperbolic time chamber? For the whole day? I didn't realize they could handle ten times gravity yet. Too bad they didn't do that when they fought Vegeta and Nappa. I'm curious, will Krillin and PIccolo finally get a chance to enter?
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