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Post by gokuromario on Apr 4, 2005 14:19:42 GMT -5
i think it's actually alright to double post on this part of the forum, i do it all the time, how else would you get your stories on here
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 4, 2005 14:33:34 GMT -5
Lol ok I'll do that from now on. And I'll explain everything in the next chapter because I have the bases for every chapter that will happen from now on! I will post it once I have "fleshed it out" What did you think about the last few chapters I did anyway?
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 4, 2005 14:50:13 GMT -5
Chapter 5 - 09:30 AM Breakfast 10:40 AM Death of Buu 12:00 PM Lunch 14:00 PM Catching Up on old times! 16:00 PM Heya Piccolo! Goku frowned. "I can't sense Dende anywhere... I thought it was Piccolo who wished us back at first but his powerlevel vanished." Pai looked solemn. "Well er.. Mr. Goku sir.. Um Piccolo we THINK was absorbed by Cell.." Goku frowned again. "But Cell isnt even in existence anymore!" "Then who took Piccolo away?!" Akia stuttered shrilly. "Hey calm down we'll figure this out!" Goku said, "Yeah dad we will" interrupted Gohan, he stepped out next to Goku. "Dad should we search their memories?" he said quietly. Goku mumbled "Um I already did" "Wah!?" Gohan was as supprised as Pai and Akia, "What did you find??" he then asked. Goku then said the thing that made them all gasp. "Majin Buu absorbed Piccolo." They all surrounded him "Goku how do you know?" "Goku when did this happen?""Goku--" "Goku---" "Goku--" "Everyone be quiet" he said firmly taking charge. "It is easy to tell that Buu absorbed Piccolo because of Buu's increase in power. Then he added "I suppose the one is controlling him as he did Broly" Krillen jumped up "HIM? He's still here?!" Goku replied almost bored "Yes he is Krillen, he is immortal remember?" Goten then crouched down and spoke to Pai quitely. Goten muttered something in his ear. Pai said something shortly in return. Goten then jumped up as Krillen did. "Dad we have another problem!" Goku turned around quickly. Goten then said "They used the Blackstar dragonballs to wish us all back." Goku's eyes widened. "Not again.." he moaned. "We need another dragon radar I guess.. But first we need to take care of all these demons and restore order to the Earth!" Goku, Gohan, Trunks and Goten formulated a plan while the others protected the lookout from demons who had sensed the new strong powerlevels! Chapter 5 - Part two Pan built up her ki to its highest form then threw a massiv ki blast at a green hairy demon with wings shouting *Giblaze!* She then turned around and side kicked a tiny demon with huge fangs in the face shattering all its teeth. The green demon was back and it was going through a hesnshin transformation, it grew to 5x its normal size and slammed pan hard with its newly found tail. Krillen then powered up and shouted "Destructo disk!" and threw it at the demon its head fell off and dark blood seeped into the cracks in the floor tiles. Pan got to her feet and Krillen gave her a thumbs up she shouted to him with a pained look on her face "Watch out Krillen!" Krillen turned and found a huge demon resembling the one and only Garlic Junior! Krillen's face darkened. "So the dead zone opened?" "Yes it did baldy, just in time again to absorb you and your friends!" Garlic transformed into his larger form and powered up. He threw a ki blast at Yamcha shouting "Makeo Blast!" And smirked as Yamcha fell down frozen. He laughed openly "Hahahah you fools you are no match for me Garlic the immortal demon!" It was Pan who made the first move she charged her ki and forced it into ki rings she tied him up so he couldn't move. Garlic still thought she was useless. Oh boy was he wrong. He laughed showing his fangs when he did this Pan went and knocked them out. "Haha! You like talking but I don't like you to!" She placed a grenade in his mouth and made him swallow it. She smiled sweetly and said "Sweet Dreams fatty!" Garlic was blasted into smitherines, beyond repair! Just then Goku, Gohan, Trunks and Goten returned. They had a plan. Goku put a ki ball in the air. He made it so it couldn't be moved, and then he drew a map of the demon kingdom Hercule City. He then started speaking after a long silence "Now if we try to penetrate HIS layer of defences we won't get far. his guards however weak they may be would alert HIM and HE would once again come for us. And possibly do more damage than before. BUT. We could come from the sky! HE hopefully doesnt know we are alive again. If HE doesn't then we might have a chance..." Pai then stuttered "Who is H- H- HE..?" Goku turned to him and Akia. "HE" Goku began "is... no WAS, a proud warrior. A warrior who had a family friends and lots more. but then.. His own power correupted him. The warriors name was Vegeta. He had became obssessed with the dragons power to grant wishes. Vegeta, was the strongest fighter when he took over this world... He increased his advantage over us by fusing himself with the first and second dragon's, Porunga and Shenron. He became the Dragon Lord his fighting styles increased and so did his power. He absorbed as many people as he possibly could.. Including old friends of ours... Uub... dende... He then decided to kill all that remained. We took him down once and fled. All of us were seperated except for me and Gohan. We had perfected our fusion and we were ready..." Goku's voice shook "We weren't strong enough! before he came for us again he summoned omega shenron from the depths of the underworld and absorbed him. He then had his way with us. He wiped us out. he cornered us all. he killed us. we didn't know who had passed on and had no way to bring eachother back so..." Gohan continued the story from there "Once gone, Vegeta the dragon lord then wished for a portal into hell and for immortallity. His wishes were granted he gained power as ruler and he is still stronger than all of us combined." "Thats where you're wrong Gohan. With these two" Goku pointed at Akia and Pai "It might just work!" Gohan stood bemused and everyone else stood there watching the two children who were supposedly strong enough to help theme defeat Vegeta Prince of Saiyans, the dragon lord. Akia then asked "If you guys were strong enough to beat him the first time then why couldn't you break through... Wait. Were you in heaven?" "I can answer that!" said a voice from the shadows. Kibitokai leaped over Akia's head. "Welcome back Supreme Kai" Gohan said softly "Well then Akia. Yes I know your name too blah blah. They were in the land of Kai's with me." Kibitokai started "They couldn't use ki blasts because Vegeta had made one of his followers wish for the 'Z-warriors' to not be able to use ki blasts or destroy all of existence." Kibitokai stopped. "But wait... How did you use ki a minute ago then..." Gohan stepped in "I think I can answer that" He said shortly. "You see, when we were wished back to life our halo, signifying our death's dissapeared along with the curse!" He said he seemed to be saitisfyed. "Well then. I have a new member for the Z-Crew Goku" Kibitokai then said with a sly grin on his face "When he found out who the overlord was he demanded to help us. And before them stood one of Goku's first ki enabled nemisis... NAPPA!!! "Well hello there!" Nappa said sarcastically. "This is only for revenge purposes don't think I like any of you at all!" "Oh don't worry Nappa we don't like you either" Gohan said dryly. Kibitokai scratched his head "Goku he is on "peroll" if you know what I mean. The otherworld's policing forces are trying to catch some of the fighters we lost and Nappa of all of them wasn't doing anything wrong!" "Well sorry but I think he'll be of some help!" Kibitokai ended. Then Nappa did something incredible. He transformed into a Super Saiyan right before their very eyes. His eyes grew deep and his head began to get as shiny as the sun. "Well kiddies lets go play with the big scary demons!" Nappa said killing the mood. Everyone slowly backed away from him, not wanting to share the desease of bad-jok-itus (I know that was a bad one too ) "Well then Kibitokai. We wont letcha down!" Trunks said they all leaped off the lookout and flew at top speed to Hercule city.
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Post by Trunksangel79 on Apr 5, 2005 5:32:45 GMT -5
I was kinda of confused at first,but now I think I'm starting to understand it some.
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Post by Majunks on Apr 6, 2005 8:45:19 GMT -5
Why does everyone want to absorb everyone else? Where is Kabito Kai? And what timeline does this break off of, GT? I'm still kinda lost but it's all starting to come back together... I think.
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 6, 2005 12:50:06 GMT -5
I just added the last part to Chapter 5 part 2 and I'll post part 3 shortly.
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 6, 2005 14:41:00 GMT -5
Chapter 5 - Part 3
The Z-warriors (And Nappa) touched down 50 miles away from Hercule City. "Ok" Goku said "Lets get to our strongest forms." Goku transformed into a supersaiyan4, Gohan simply powered up, Goten and Trunks fused and transformed into Gotenks Super Saiyan 3, Akia and Pai transformed into supersaiyan 2's. And everyone else powered up immensly. As soon as everyone had got to their top power demons came flooding from Hercule city and Goku made sure everyone had a link to him. They all used instant translocation and appeared past all the defences, they flew upwards until they began to touch the stars and then followed Goku enough until they had to plummet back down to the ground again. They all landed Yamcha was out of breath and seeing spots. "Um guys" Yamcha said "Maybe this is too much for me and Choutzu (Choutzu was lying on the floor) every one else, even Hercule (Who was using a jetpack again) rolled their eyes. Yamcha and Choutzu were then told to hold the demons off from there. Goku and Gohan looked at eachother and then decided to fuse together. Goku and Gohan said at exactly the same time while performing the fusion dance "Fu-sion-HAA!!" They apeared as one, the warrior spoke "Hi again guys it's me Gohaku!" He powered up to supersaiyan 4 and his fur turned blue. Everyone stared at Gohaku, Tien looked apprehensive. "Well it looks like we've achieved supersaiyan 5!" His hair was indigo and the traditional fusion clothes were gold and dark blue. Blue electrical sparks of lightning filled the air around them. "Allright!" Gohaku said "looks like we have alll the power we need!" They walked through the main pathway leading to Vegeta's main room. And were approached by a familiar energy. "Wow looks like you had a makeover!" Buu chuckled to himself. "Everyone run ahead!" Gohaku said going into his defensive stance. "Hmmm Buu you look weaker than you were earlier! Did you absorb Yamcha and Choutzu like we wanted?" Gohaku laughed "Aww well looks like you need to absorb more people... Guess what? That won't happen." Buu laughed from behind them "That was my after image you fool!!!" he pointed out and absorbed Gohaku.
"Hey dad I found the others!" Gohan called to Goku from inside buu. "I've even found a thing that looks a bit like Piccolo!" "Shut up Gohan..." Piccolo said. "I was already seperated from the dragon so Ha." "Well I'll go and pull you out then!" Gohan laughed and freed Piccolo from the toxin of Buu's body. Goku meanwhile had already left Buu's body and was pummeling Buu already. "Com'on Gohan hurry up outta there so I can make this thing vanish for good!" As if he was asked to Gohan appeared next to Goku accompanied by Piccolo and the dragon who Piccolo dissmissed immediately and destroyed the dragonballs he created before. Gohan and goku then finished Buu off simply by tapping it on the head softly. Buu turned to emerald flames and became dust on the floor. "Hmm nice plan goku" Piccolo said giving him a thumbs up. "Well actually it was Gohans idea." Gohan then said to Goku "Dad should we fuse again? I think we have more of a chance as super saiyan 5 than a 4 and normal guy. "You're right Gohan." They became a super saiyan 5 again in an instant and joined the others with Piccolo, Yamcha and Choutzu. "Here he is!" Gohaku shouted out pointing at a large dragon like creature. "Greetings Goku and the rest of you Z-warriors!" The dragon said "Looks like you found me huh? Well I disposed of Vegeta a long time ago... He shouldn't have absorbed me, Omega Shenron!
They all gaped at him "I still have his powers but Vegeta is merely a slave now. "Slave!!" he shouted come to me!" Vegeta walked up to the dragon lord and stared at him. He seemed to have aged millions of years. "Well he did wish for immortallity..." The demon said to them "He has no ki left." The dragon laughed and pointed out Vegeta's powerlevel of 10. "Hahaha what a weakling" It said, it flicked vegeta sending him straight through the wall. Vegeta didn't get back up. Piccolo then did something astonishing. He had the 7 dragonballs in front of him. "Eternal Dragon. I wish for Vegeta to no longer have eternal life YET be the way we last saw him before he was attacked by this evil. Let him have his old strength back!" Piccolo yelled. "It has been done" Said the dragon lord almost as if he had been hypnotised. Vegeta seemed to be getting younger by the second. The dragon lord screamed with rage and shouted "Well it looks like I'll get even more power now!" And he absorbed Gohaku. Goku freed all the occupants of the dragon lords body including: Uub, Mr Buu, Dende, Bulma, Chi-Chi and Android *8! Meanwhile Gohan went further into the body of the dragon and tugged on the center of all that worked inside. Inside all there was, were: Seven Dragonballs each covered in blood and veins. Gohan shouted out "Destructo Disk!" and cut all the veins inside and released the dragonballs and omega shenron from the core. They all used instant translocation or clinged onto someone who could use it and appeared next to the other Z-warriors who had been fighting off near by demons. Vegeta had just received a huge power up when the power he had possessed years before then joined his newly accuired power. He then transformed into a Super Saiyan 4 and shouted out: "Welcome to super vegeta's big bang attack!" then when the dragon was being destroyed he said: "And welcome to oblivion!" And thre another ki blast at it. The body was destroyed and the portal to hell located next to the dragon sealed up, leaving all the demons off hell alone. The people all around the world then transformed back to normal. The blood red sky turned back to a clear blue and all seemed normal again. Except for one thing. Vegeta was sobbing on Bulma who then smacked him one and he stopped. "I don't want you drying on my shoulder Vegeta until I have an apology!" She shouted. Vegeta looked at her solemnly. "I'm sorry" he said "I'm sorry everyone." Akia and Pai looked at Goku who then said: "I know what you're thinking. I said you would change everything and you don't see how you've done anything at all." they nodded. "Well you did. You brought us all back to life. You saved us all and you saved the world." "And by the way" Goku continued: "You're parents may have been from hell, but you are really something. You are two full blooded saiyans, and I think that it is curious as to how you were born... I thought there were no saiyan women left." he stopped. "But then again..." Goku turned to Vegeta. "Vegeta was there any other colonies of saiyans in the universe before Frieza destroyed planet vegeta?" Vegeta replied "Of course we were once the strongest of all races... But I think Frieza killed them all... Except maybe one." Vegeta stopped. "Kakarot. We need to find the planet Daigoba!! It is the only saiyan planet that Frieza may not have destroyed!!"
To be continued....
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 9, 2005 5:45:04 GMT -5
I need a reply you guys... I need to know if it is ok, crap, getting better, excellentey lol. Someone reply.
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Post by ss4axel on Apr 9, 2005 17:57:32 GMT -5
It was good, kinda confusing and a little fast paced but good plot and desciptions! ;D
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 10, 2005 4:24:44 GMT -5
Thats all I wanted to hear. Thanks Axel. ;D Now I can get started on the next story!
Also I'm changing my writing style.. You will see soon.
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 10, 2005 4:30:02 GMT -5
Dragonball AP - Altered Past
Story 2 - Daigoba and Beyond!
Goku: Whats next then? I mean what can we do now? We need to find the dragonballs, find planet Daigoba, thats what it is called right Vegeta?
Vegeta: yeah thats right Kakarot.
All the Z warriors were on board a spaceship that was set on auto pilot. The dragonradar was inserted into the main computer screen so that it headed to the planet rather than through the vigorous driving that any of the Z warriors would do.
The ships name was Neo Blaze, and was owned by Bulma and Vegeta. It was one of Bulma's latest inventions. The ship had 25 bedrooms, a sauna, a training room and much much more! There were even plans for a swimming pool before Bulma was rushed into building it all within 10 minutes! But she was happy with Neo Blaze and treats it as a newborn baby
While Bulma, Chi-Chi, Videl and Bra were all in the main room eating lunch, the main fighters were in the training room testing their limits!
Trunks: Haha shame on you Goten! My and your dads fusion form is way stronger than yours and my dads!
Goten: Oh get real Trunks we kick butt as Vegeton!
Goku: Why did we fuse anyway Trunks?
Trunks: I dunno I was bored
Vegeta: Hmmph you wouldn't have to be if you would actually train in here!
Trunks: Good point pops! Ok Goku lets go through it again!
Trunks and Goku: FUUUU - SIIOON- HAAA!! They said while performing the fusion dance
Mystery Fusion: Well it's me Gogetenks!! A Bright white aura surrounded Gogetenks as he powered up
Goten and Vegeta: FUUUU - SIIOON - HAAA!! They chanted while performing the fusion dance
Vegeton: Just bring it Gogetenks!! As Vegeton powers up a magenta aura surrounds him
Gogetenks: Lets get to it!
Vegeton rushed at Gogetenks and threw a tremendous ki blast then used instant translocation and appeared behind Gogetenks. He smacked him hard in the head, or tried to at least!
Gogetenks: You should have seen your face when you realised it was an after image Vegeton!
Gogetenks began making strange hand movements and charged up his ki
Gogetenks: Burrning.. .. ..
Then he made his hands cupped and put them behind him
Gogetenks: Ka..Me..Ha..Ma..HAAAA!!!
He pushed his hands fowards releasing such a powerful ki blast that the ship almost broke into pieces if it weren't for the barriers. Vegeton was slammed into the wall and he hit his head on the side, it lolled on his shoulders
Gogetenks: You alright dude?
He crouched next to Vegeton and then was hit in the face by a ki blast
Vegeton: Did you like my after image technique Gogetenks? Hahahahaha!
Gogetenks: That does it! BURNING DRAGON FIST!
Gogetenks jumped up and slashed Vegeton in the face. He made many marks and eventually made the letter "G"
Gogetenks: G is for Gogetenks!
He said slyly mimicking Zoro.
Gogetenks and Vegeton: Aww Dang!
The fusion then came apart.
Trunks: I reckon we won Goku. Haha.
Meanwhile on the otherside of the training room..
Gohan: C'mon Pan lets go! You need to master this technique before you can leave!
Pan: But Daaa-aad..
Gohan: But Nothing.
Pan: FINE! She gathers her ki slowly
MASENKO BLAST!
She fired a masenko straight at Gohan who deflected it back to her
Pan: Oh too easy! MASENKO BLAST!
Both masenkos hit eachother and exploded on Gohan making him covered in cinders
Pan: Later dad
Gohan: *murmers to himself* When did I say she could go??
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 10, 2005 5:27:18 GMT -5
Ok Hows that? its only the intro to story 2 and it's only part 1 lol.
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Post by ss4axel on Apr 10, 2005 13:47:10 GMT -5
I like it, much easier to read. Way to go! btw where is Pai and Akia during this story??
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SilverWarriorGoku
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Post by SilverWarriorGoku on Apr 10, 2005 16:31:32 GMT -5
Pai and Akia are going to be more heavily fleshed out and described in this, as I said above that was only part 1 of the intro to the new story. so the rest of the z warriors will come along soon.
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Post by ss4axel on Apr 10, 2005 18:46:09 GMT -5
Oh, ok
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