Post by rjxsapri® on Jan 11, 2005 0:51:38 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Warning: This "story" contains religious references that people might find offensive. It might also contain descriptions of strong violence and gore and some rude language.
The author of this "story" also wants to point out that he's not a writer but rather a lazy-arse. He's also still learning English since it isn't his native language. That means this story will have a lot of grammatical errors and mizspelingz. Not to mention horrendous story telling. If you notice any gramatical errors or misspellings, let the author know by PM him.
If you have any constructive comments (suggestions), they are welcome right away. If you have any destructive comments (making fun of the author), you can formally write them on a paper, put it on an envelope, stamp it, and stick it on your motherf**king arse. [/glow]
Fog I: Cain and Satanas (Part Two)
---Cain felt the gods were unfair to him, he wondered why he had to pay homage to them and show love to them and their creation while he didn't feel any love coming from them to him.
---"There must be a way," he said to himself. "There must be a way for me to talk with a god."
---Cain stood up for a moment, looked at the sky, and then fell on his knees to begin praying. He took a deep breath, stretched his arms wide open, and said in a high voice:
---"Satanas, my beloved lord, my king; Yajireh, my beloved goddess, my Queen. I am here alone, without the company of other humans, and I must know why…why have you chosen this path for me? why must I suffer when everyone around me lives with joy? Why am I to be here alone at this moment, trying to speak with you? I am a man that loves you and your creation, why do I not feel loved?"
---After saying that he closed his eyes waiting for something to happen, waiting for the gods to come down and hug him, expecting to open his eyes and see the woman he loved smiling right in front of him, telling him that she loved him back. He pretended to feel peace on his soul while he had his eyes closed, but then he opened his eyes and noticed that everything was the same. The birds on the tree above him began to fly away, and clouds began to hide the shiny sun making the morning a gray one. Cain recognized that this was the loneliest moment of his life, and that the gods wanted it that way.
---He felt a great disillusion and began to cry. He crawled by the lake with the intention of drowning himself. But when he reached the lake, the clouds that were hiding the sun dispersed, the sun began to shine, and Cain looked at his reflection and noticed how hard he cried.
---"I must be the only human able to cry like this," he said to himself.
---"Indeed, no other human has ever cried the way you just did, Cain," said Satanas. Who was standing right in the middle of the lake, with the sun shining directly over him. Cain looked up trying to see who had just talked to him, but the sun didn't allow him to see his face clearly. He tried to cover his eyes with his arm to see more clearly, but all he could see was a male human figure, standing right over the water, in the middle of the lake.
---"Who are you?" he asked loudly. "And how do you know my name?"
---"Who else?" said Satanas, laughing in a sympathetic way. "Who else could be standing here over the water, knowing your name, and being the only one who knows that you cry?" He asked in a gentle tone.
---Cain could not believe what was happening. He looked down on the lake and began to cry again. But this time, his heart was not filled with sorrow, it was filled with hope.
---"Oh God!" He said with labored breathing. "I feel so...alone, I don't feel loved my lord. Why? If all I want is to give out my love."
---Satanas looked directly towards Cain and began to approach him. Cain felt afraid by having an absolute power so close to him, but when he could finally see Satanas's face clearly, and noticed the kindness of his expression, his fear totally disappeared and was substituted by peace on his soul. Satanas kept walking until he was right in front of Cain, then he crouched at the spot and looked at Cain with a smile.
---"My dear son," he said. "I know all about your feelings, but yet, they are something that I can't touch. When I created humans, I had little knowledge of the feelings that would grow on them. I have noticed that humans feel a different kind of love. It is not the love that I feel."
---Cain listened to this waiting for Satanas to do anything that would heal his heart in an instant.
---"I know that you are alone, and that there is a woman that you love. And I know that you want her to love you as much as you love her. But if you want me to make her love you, I am sorry, but human feelings are something that even the gods cannot alter"
---Cain began to weep in front of Satanas, and asked "Am I to feel sorrow for the rest of my life then?" He kept weeping. "Am I destined to die by drowning myself like I was about to do before you came to my presence? Oh, my dear God, I will not live happily if I never feel loved"
---"My dear Cain," answered Satanas. "like I told you… you cried in a way that no other human has ever cried before," he explained. "That's what got my attention, and made me come by your side."
---Satanas caressed Cain's face, which made Cain feel like someone cared about him for the first time since his mother began to suffer from an unusual illness that made her lose her reason. He stopped weeping and paid attention to what his lord was about to tell him.
---"When I heard you cry, I noticed that there is a kind of feeling in you that neither me nor Yajireh had seen before on another human. It is a human feeling, but yours is much stronger than anybody else's." Satanas put both of his hands on Cain's cheeks.
---"If you want to feel loved by the woman you love, you must use that feeling of yours. You love in a way that nobody else does and no other power is greater than that."
---Cain closed his eyes and Satanas kissed him in his forehead. When Cain opened his eyes Satanas was gone. He looked up and saw the sun was brighter than before, the birds were whistling melodies on their nests, and there was an immense and beautiful rainbow that reflected it's colors on the lake. He then looked down to see how his face changed since before Satanas came. His face looked brighter, and his eyes also seemed to have the reflection of the rainbow.
---He stood up and decided to continue on his way home. He had forgotten about the incident in the woods, about his bow and arrows, about him almost drowning himself. To him, nothing of that had happened, he just had passed through the happiest moment of his life.
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EDITED BY: SOCKPERSON
I know I didn't write too much this time, but I couldn't write too much since a lot of people have been using my computer . Besides, there's a good point in not writing too much and it is that people won't get bored and might try to read every chapter at once and not read a little bit of the chapter one day and continue another day. I think this was also a good stopping point.
The author of this "story" also wants to point out that he's not a writer but rather a lazy-arse. He's also still learning English since it isn't his native language. That means this story will have a lot of grammatical errors and mizspelingz. Not to mention horrendous story telling. If you notice any gramatical errors or misspellings, let the author know by PM him.
If you have any constructive comments (suggestions), they are welcome right away. If you have any destructive comments (making fun of the author), you can formally write them on a paper, put it on an envelope, stamp it, and stick it on your motherf**king arse. [/glow]
Fog I: Cain and Satanas (Part Two)
---Cain felt the gods were unfair to him, he wondered why he had to pay homage to them and show love to them and their creation while he didn't feel any love coming from them to him.
---"There must be a way," he said to himself. "There must be a way for me to talk with a god."
---Cain stood up for a moment, looked at the sky, and then fell on his knees to begin praying. He took a deep breath, stretched his arms wide open, and said in a high voice:
---"Satanas, my beloved lord, my king; Yajireh, my beloved goddess, my Queen. I am here alone, without the company of other humans, and I must know why…why have you chosen this path for me? why must I suffer when everyone around me lives with joy? Why am I to be here alone at this moment, trying to speak with you? I am a man that loves you and your creation, why do I not feel loved?"
---After saying that he closed his eyes waiting for something to happen, waiting for the gods to come down and hug him, expecting to open his eyes and see the woman he loved smiling right in front of him, telling him that she loved him back. He pretended to feel peace on his soul while he had his eyes closed, but then he opened his eyes and noticed that everything was the same. The birds on the tree above him began to fly away, and clouds began to hide the shiny sun making the morning a gray one. Cain recognized that this was the loneliest moment of his life, and that the gods wanted it that way.
---He felt a great disillusion and began to cry. He crawled by the lake with the intention of drowning himself. But when he reached the lake, the clouds that were hiding the sun dispersed, the sun began to shine, and Cain looked at his reflection and noticed how hard he cried.
---"I must be the only human able to cry like this," he said to himself.
---"Indeed, no other human has ever cried the way you just did, Cain," said Satanas. Who was standing right in the middle of the lake, with the sun shining directly over him. Cain looked up trying to see who had just talked to him, but the sun didn't allow him to see his face clearly. He tried to cover his eyes with his arm to see more clearly, but all he could see was a male human figure, standing right over the water, in the middle of the lake.
---"Who are you?" he asked loudly. "And how do you know my name?"
---"Who else?" said Satanas, laughing in a sympathetic way. "Who else could be standing here over the water, knowing your name, and being the only one who knows that you cry?" He asked in a gentle tone.
---Cain could not believe what was happening. He looked down on the lake and began to cry again. But this time, his heart was not filled with sorrow, it was filled with hope.
---"Oh God!" He said with labored breathing. "I feel so...alone, I don't feel loved my lord. Why? If all I want is to give out my love."
---Satanas looked directly towards Cain and began to approach him. Cain felt afraid by having an absolute power so close to him, but when he could finally see Satanas's face clearly, and noticed the kindness of his expression, his fear totally disappeared and was substituted by peace on his soul. Satanas kept walking until he was right in front of Cain, then he crouched at the spot and looked at Cain with a smile.
---"My dear son," he said. "I know all about your feelings, but yet, they are something that I can't touch. When I created humans, I had little knowledge of the feelings that would grow on them. I have noticed that humans feel a different kind of love. It is not the love that I feel."
---Cain listened to this waiting for Satanas to do anything that would heal his heart in an instant.
---"I know that you are alone, and that there is a woman that you love. And I know that you want her to love you as much as you love her. But if you want me to make her love you, I am sorry, but human feelings are something that even the gods cannot alter"
---Cain began to weep in front of Satanas, and asked "Am I to feel sorrow for the rest of my life then?" He kept weeping. "Am I destined to die by drowning myself like I was about to do before you came to my presence? Oh, my dear God, I will not live happily if I never feel loved"
---"My dear Cain," answered Satanas. "like I told you… you cried in a way that no other human has ever cried before," he explained. "That's what got my attention, and made me come by your side."
---Satanas caressed Cain's face, which made Cain feel like someone cared about him for the first time since his mother began to suffer from an unusual illness that made her lose her reason. He stopped weeping and paid attention to what his lord was about to tell him.
---"When I heard you cry, I noticed that there is a kind of feeling in you that neither me nor Yajireh had seen before on another human. It is a human feeling, but yours is much stronger than anybody else's." Satanas put both of his hands on Cain's cheeks.
---"If you want to feel loved by the woman you love, you must use that feeling of yours. You love in a way that nobody else does and no other power is greater than that."
---Cain closed his eyes and Satanas kissed him in his forehead. When Cain opened his eyes Satanas was gone. He looked up and saw the sun was brighter than before, the birds were whistling melodies on their nests, and there was an immense and beautiful rainbow that reflected it's colors on the lake. He then looked down to see how his face changed since before Satanas came. His face looked brighter, and his eyes also seemed to have the reflection of the rainbow.
---He stood up and decided to continue on his way home. He had forgotten about the incident in the woods, about his bow and arrows, about him almost drowning himself. To him, nothing of that had happened, he just had passed through the happiest moment of his life.
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EDITED BY: SOCKPERSON
I know I didn't write too much this time, but I couldn't write too much since a lot of people have been using my computer . Besides, there's a good point in not writing too much and it is that people won't get bored and might try to read every chapter at once and not read a little bit of the chapter one day and continue another day. I think this was also a good stopping point.