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Post by gokuromario on Mar 5, 2005 17:51:54 GMT -5
CHAPTER 1 – part 1, introduction
Legend tells of a land far into the deep reaches of the Makeyura realm where harmony was taken away from gentle people like a plague of locusts, nothing could predict the outcome of the Yuri’s present misfortune, nothing except the tarot keeper.
As the Yuri’s slept soundly in their chambers waiting for the warm sensation of morning due, a shadow appeared in the road, a shadow carrying with it an aura which stripped the once beautiful roses of their beauty and the faithful companion of its faith, all hope had ended from that day forth.
As the winds grew thick, so did the fog, no living beast of man nor god had the will nor the strength to overcome what was to commence, for it was a truly tragic event, predictions were all but pointless to most but to one man they were all he stood for, he came that night without warning, bringing unsettling destruction upon the city of Yule, and though we ran, the creatures of the dark realm soon captured the last of our people, nothing stopped the Tarot keeper, nothing could and nothing will, nothing earthbound or universal, many in the past have tried to reason with the Tarot keeper but none have returned to tell of there journey, it seemed like we had angered the gods in some way, and till this day we question their methods.
If there is anyone out there willing to step forth and oppose this stranger to our world then I urge you to do so, for though it may be too late for us, somewhere out there may lie a hero, a hero willing to creep out of the darkness and stop the Tarot keeper before he predicts the end, the Tarot Keeper has predicted your arrival, soon you shall come, soon you shall end our misery, and return our land to what it once was, paradise.
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Post by gokuromario on Mar 5, 2005 17:52:10 GMT -5
Part 2 awakening of a hero
The sun glistened through on the window pane like a phoenix rising from the white ashes, young Zuro slept soundly in his bed never moving an inch to scratch his leg, perhaps if this young lad had been more active through younger life he would have been up by now but he isn’t. The alarm clock expels a mighty blast of noise to awaken a great beast lying inside of the young Zuro, he lifted his arms in an awkward fashion and thrashed his fist down onto the alarm clock smashing it in two, and he rose with a groan.
Zuro turned his head around to look at the dismantled clock and thought to himself, “Three already, what a night, no more king size jalapeños for me”, as that thought cleared his mind he fell backwards onto his pillow, his head slightly grazing the bad frame and slipping down to a soft landing course, he let out a yawn and rolled to his side, seconds later a mighty thrust down on his torso occurred, it was his younger brother Hino, coming to greet him as he normally does at this time.
“Back off twerp, it’s three in the morning” he said with a tug.
“Morning, last time I checked the sun was up” he said this with a child like innocence that could only come from his ten year old mind, Zuro raised an arm and pushed him away, Hino struggled to keep on his feet and soon found himself bottom down on the floor. “Hey are you gonna get up or what” he said rising to his feet, he shakes his older brother hard, a battle of pillows ensues with the first throw started by Zuro and his blue Thundercat’s incorporated brand, followed by Hino’s array of smothering techniques, there mother soon burst through the doors to find the two fighting, she quickly breaks up the argument.
“Honestly, you two, just look at this mess you’ve caused” and she was right, there fight had unleashed a dazzling array of feathers across the room, both boys stared across the feather floating room in dismay thinking that it looked like some giant snow globe gone array, “don’t tell me that your sorry, just clean up and come downstairs” she left the room with a shuddering thud, Zuro began blaming Hino for the incident and Hino lunges forward with another attack which is blocked, the two are locked in an overwhelming battle of strength which obviously the older of the two is winning.
“GET OFF, GET OFF” muffled Hino from under the pillow case, despite this plea, Zuro did not restrain his grip, momentarily Hino began to stop his squirming, Zuro became concerned and raised his pillow only to be greeted by a smirk and a wallop, this my friends is where I leave you to move onto the next part.
Later that morning, battle weary, the two boys trudge down the 21 steps of the house to greet their mother and father on another day well done for a three course breakfast that includes bacon, sausage, and more bacon, happiness filled the room in a subtle low anticipated way, and as the boys ate the smorgasbord of indigestible meat products, both boys were filled with a feeling of selfishness, if you can call wanting less of this crap selfishness, thankfully the meal ended with a bang as Zuro noticed the magical time device or ‘clock’ as you will and remembered that he was late for evening classes, he rose from the table and run to collect his belongings, ending this part and my sanity, oh the meaty chunky ness of it all.
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Post by gokuromario on Mar 5, 2005 17:52:27 GMT -5
Part 3 – the book of Makeyura
Zuro left for school filled with the feeling of greasiness and soggy toast, this wasn’t such a pleasant feeling because it seemed to fill his head with visions of dancing pigs “ugh” he would think to himself as he walked on. Goodbyes were said and the feeling of doubt overwhelmed him because he had forgotten to wash the taste of pork away with toothpaste.
“HEY ZURO” a voice came from across the street, Zuro couldn’t concentrate with the feeling of artery clogging overwhelming his thoughts but he looked up anyway to see a surprising site.
A distance of 300 yards was conquered before he met up with one of his class mates, a pretty young girl named Shinu, she ran to him from across the road, Shinu was a pretty faced 15 year old girl who’s characteristics would usually annoy the common moronic psychopath but for Zuro he found he in your face ness cute, she greeted him with a smile, but all Zuro could think about was the thought of facing detention if he was late.
“Can this wait Shinu, I don’t have time……” she abruptly placed a finger on his mouth with a giggle, she moved in for the kill, Zuro crouched back slightly worried and horrified, Shinu took a left at his face and dived herself into his right pocket, she scrambled through it looking for something special, “hey what are you doing” Zuro said to her laughing as she tickled his outer leg.
Shinu pulled back holding a piece of chewing gum “uh huh, I knew you were hiding it somewhere” as she said this she immediately ripped off the wrapper and began chewing on it like a baby at its mothers teat, Zuro stared at the over eccentric girl, a little fascinated, also a little embarrassed, he watched as she moved her mouth up and down, forwards and backwards, her teeth caressing the gum and then swallowing it whole, he became squeamish because he had never seen someone do such a thing.
“thanks, needed that” she said whilst thrusting her right fist into his shoulder like a friendly pat most men exchange with each other, but she was no man, she was a young girl, very odd in nature and not exactly the most subtle of creatures, “OOOHHH almost forgot” she turns to rumble through her backpack, Zuro watches in anticipation as she brings out what looks to be a dusty old recipe book, “TAADDAAA” she said with a chibi smile.
“Um, great, a dusty scrap book, what next an eraser with mold on it” he said with the slightest of interest in his 17 year old head.
“No silly, this is the book of Makeyura” a sweat gland drips from Zuro’s face “you don’t know what the Makeyura is?”
“Um…….no” he said looking puzzled to the extreme.
“The Makeyura was a planet much like this one with an ancient race of people who lived in harmony upon it until a great sorcerer came and disrupted…..” she began doing weird gestures, her face became screwed up, her tone lowered and she scared Zuro, “THE VERY FABRIC OF REALITY ITSELF”
Zuro said to her with an awkward smile “um, that’s great, but I have to run, see you later” before he could walk awkwardly off into the distance, Shinu caught him by the ear and pulled him back towards her.
“You don’t believe me do you?” she stated with a disgruntled look, all Zuro could mutter were endless sounds of muffled buts and I uh’s……. “You don’t believe me DO YOU?”
“YES I BELIEVE YOU” managing to get her to release her grip on his already swollen ear.
“If you believe me, then prove it, kiss me”, Zuro stood there puzzled as she pouted her lips, she opened one eye and frowned at him, “if your really telling the truth then you’ll kiss me with no repercussions”
Zuro wondered what to do as the young girl closed her eyes, pushed herself in a little and pouted her lips, her head seemed to grow inside Zuro’s mind like a balloon filling the air with its presence, he decided to think fast, “uh yeah, I would but I really gotta go, besides you’re a little young for me….not that I’m saying you’re a baby or anything it’s just…….” Shinu opened one eye, frowned at him once more, Zuro almost falls back with this expression, he decides to make a dash for his life, “um……BYE”, with that he’s gone, Shinu stands there pouting, she seems mad at this whole situation, she crouches down and stuffs her book back into her backpack, raises herself to her feet.
“I knew he didn’t believe me”, she walks off humming the tune to tragedy, the strange young girl in the short skirt and green top humming the tune to an otherwise out of date classic.
This is where I must leave this part now, chapter 2 shall commence in but a mere moment, please enjoy your read young reader and let your mind be filled with happiness, goodbye.
END OF PART 3 END OF CHAPTER 1
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Post by gokuromario on Mar 5, 2005 17:53:49 GMT -5
hey guys, this is just something new i was thinking of trying out, i know that people from other sites have been saying that i should write my stories as true fan fics ie in story mode so i thought i'd come up with something new, i hope you like it.
i was trying to keep my story for the first chapter short and sweet so i hope it came out pretty kool, well see ya later.
from gohanromario
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Post by ~*Hieislove*~ on Mar 5, 2005 17:55:14 GMT -5
I havent read it , I'm reading it right now, but what the hell is that O.o
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Post by TheDarkPrince on Mar 5, 2005 18:00:56 GMT -5
Nice work, is this your first original story on this forum? I want to see how this plays out.
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Post by gokuromario on Mar 5, 2005 18:00:56 GMT -5
its a message to my fans ;D anyway i was wondering how you could have read this in like 45 seconds
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Post by TheDarkPrince on Mar 5, 2005 18:01:32 GMT -5
I can read pretty fast. ;D
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Post by gokuromario on Mar 5, 2005 18:02:36 GMT -5
yeah this is my first, i didnt think it was that good but it will play out eventually
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Post by ~*Hieislove*~ on Mar 5, 2005 18:10:23 GMT -5
its good for a first
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Post by gokuromario on Mar 5, 2005 18:12:11 GMT -5
thanks, i didnt really know whether i wanted it to be anime style or not because it seemed to just turn out that way, as you can see i made up some of the names.
the story is basically about this evil magician from this other realm that uses tarot cards to predict peoples futures and to destroy worlds, i havent developed much beyond that.
by the way did either of you find any of it funny, i thought this was kinda funny thinking about it.
"Zuro left for school filled with the feeling of greasiness and soggy toast, this wasn’t such a pleasant feeling because it seemed to fill his head with visions of dancing pigs “ugh” he would think to himself as he walked on. Goodbyes were said and the feeling of doubt overwhelmed him because he had forgotten to wash the taste of pork away with toothpaste."
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Post by ~*Hieislove*~ on Mar 5, 2005 19:15:55 GMT -5
No not really Well the story seems interseting, I would have to read more for final thoughts
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Post by gokuromario on Mar 5, 2005 19:33:51 GMT -5
kk
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Post by ~*Hieislove*~ on Mar 5, 2005 19:47:35 GMT -5
I saw that you have 2 up and Arent you taking the writing alittle too fast? You should take your time, and reread and add new details to make it better
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Post by gokuromario on Mar 6, 2005 4:14:09 GMT -5
yeah maybe but i'm pretty happy with the way my second one turned out, i'll maybe develop these later on.
i just felt bored and wanted to write it as fast as i could so i did, so i'll take my time with chapter three
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